Comments : Bright red ink

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    There are so many ways this poem can go honestly. In the first stanza it seems like you are writing your true feelings out but there is something deeper than that I feel. The bright red ink is the key line I think. It could symbolize two things. The red ink could just be red ink. But it also could be a metaphor for your blood or the way you feel inside. If it is a cutting thing, I feel depression could be at play here because depression can lead to cutting.

    I loved the use of tears and loved how you put them in their own stanza. Tears can tell a story within themselves. Here I feel like they are tears of sadness. As in since you are writing your feelings out it can be a very emotional thing and crying is a very healthy way to cope with that. It also goes well with the first stanza overall. The red ink and the tears tells me as the readerthere is a lot of sadness involved. You use crying and writing so far to get eeverything out.

    The third stanza is very sad. But I liked how you said the words are black. That tells me that the words you are writing are very dark and sad. The poem you are writing about could be this poem. I can totally see your heart is pure but it's sad that bad things happen to good people. Your hands scream? Hmm. That's a tough line to figure out. But I think it could mean you are writing a lot or fast. I think it always feel good to write about our feelings though. You are a mess that you can really tell from your words.

    I feel like in the fifth stanza you finally realize you could be writing a suicide note perhaps? And because you are giving up it makes since a lot. I really liked the ending line. Scars are never easy to take away. I truly think that emotional scars are worse than physical. Anyways. I really loved how the stanzas connected together. The story is beautiful and the darkness stays consistent. Overall very well written. Well done.

  • 10 years ago

    by mazzy star

    You write so well.
    True emotions.