Comments : Ungrateful

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Judging comment:

    I immediately felt the profundity in your words, the significance of you writing this and actually voicing it to this person. The opening lines had that hint of sadness and recognition that you are coming through this relationship wiser perhaps, realizing you do not stand on equal grounds. That you were simply a matter to be dealt with, or maybe something to be conquered like a child's desire to win or have control over something. Powerful image with the marbles; you have a confident voice in this. I also liked how the last two lines stood alone, because it gave me a new way to interpret the poem. That maybe this person could not love or knew how to love at the time, so it wasn't like they were purposefully trying to bring you down, yet they didn't know how to work through emotions or focus on the little things that could draw you nearer. There's vagueness in this yet multiple lines that tell of a greater story behind it. This made me ponder many meanings as well as that there may be bitterness, but mostly, (in my opinion), you are showing the colors of the present time. And it has caused you to wonder if both of your inexperience and different approaches at love can somehow give you a connection. Give you a purpose together. The ending line: isn't it "two peas in a pod"? At least that's what I've heard. But changing it to "pot" makes me think you both will create something new, take a new spin on it and grow in an environment you've never lived in before. The title made me think both of you have felt abandoned by another, and you forgot to appreciate life and love. (7)

  • 10 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    What a refreshing little gem this poem is!
    I have never read from this author but I was glad this poem was nominated and I will continue to read her poetry!
    I took many angles on this poem. Sadness twisted with a possible ending of a friendship to perhaps sibling rivalry. I admire poems that take me on many avenues of interpretation.
    Truly a dazzling poem by Saerelune!!