Comments : Life is a Weapon ( You may disagree with my view)

  • 10 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Yes, life is all this and it depends on how we choose to use these weapons in life! Each stanza has got a point to be taken and at the end of the day it is what one has experienced and lived that makes them write.

  • 10 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Wawaoooooooo
    very nicely written by you, good imagination,
    life as weapon, I never think like this,or never listen.

    Clap clap clap for L.L. for this awesome poem
    100/100

  • 10 years ago

    by ddavidd

    Life is a gun,
    that we keep to ourselves,
    with no bullets,
    to reminds us
    that life can be dangerous,

    In this there is a fallacious logic: Is life the gun that ... or our lives condition is only the reminder of that gun ? You used them both in one sentence.
    Objects which symbolically are there to remind us of thing, are usually not the same objects as those things. One could be one self, but one could not be in the same time, also, its own symbol as other one as well, specially not in the context of this poem.
    See, to keep the winning possibility alive, I did not want to criticize this before the contest's result because it was easy to assume that they are going to over look the many flaws that it has, for the reason that you needed the acknowledgment for the real good works that you do in which often remain un appreciated.
    You could avoid this flaw by applying the world Like.
    There are other flaws here too that I do not mention. According to me this is not your good work. It is as you might know subconsciously: an experimental try. But congratulation any way for you disserve it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Darren

    Judges comments

    I have omitted the second half of the title, Very arrogant of me I know to do this to somebody else's piece, but I feel it is not necessary in the context of the poem. The poem reads like a lesson in humanity. It shows that we have these weapons at our disposal but what makes us human is the ability to choose not to use them. It reads like a sermon, it is a lesson in acceptance, a challenge to live peacefully. I like how each stanza is short but to the point and I think the repetition works well throughout. Although when I first read through it I didn't like it!! So in all I feel if you understand what the writer was thinking then there could be no way that you would disagree with her view. 7 points.

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Judging comment:

    This poem resonated with me in the sense that it persuaded me to think of how I see life (if life can be seen solely as something to be defended and protected), or if there are only circumstances that truly make life dangerous. The perspective, maturity, and prudence in this poem is breathtaking. I believe in peace and pray for it, yet I don't know if war can ever be banished. There must be just causes for a war, as with just causes to defend one's self, to use a gun. Others may not care about that. The personification of life was honest and impacted me. How true it is that hope may be our only option yet it is a daily struggle to hope and trust in the future. I have never thought of "life" has uses different weapons in order to help us survive. I agreed with this line the most:

    "life is a weapon
    awaiting for the time
    we use it
    to defend ourselves,
    from ourselves."

    That made me think deeper. That we give excuses why we can't help someone else, we use our disadvantages or what happens in our life to sometimes distance ourselves or hurt others. But in the end, it is us who are out of control. We can't always control life.

    What made this poem and your voice even stronger, was the transition in the middle of the poem from previously talking about life as a gun and rope, to saying that life doesn't strangle us or cut us. It gives us a choice. It may knock sense into us, or fear, or it may wait until the moment closest to death so we realize how valuable life is. How much we need it, even if we call it worthless. The ending statement was foreboding but also keen. It seemed philosophical in a way, as I perceived from this closing line that you ultimately believe people are good. And that life is not bad, it's simply the circumstance or what we can make of it.... the potential. Life CAN be dangerous, but it is not given to us loaded with bullets. It is us who choose to do that. What an eye-opening write I thoroughly enjoyed. (10)

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    I agree with your point of view..
    Very true, very true

    Life is a weapon that does not destroy us but helps us destroy the destroyer (our own evil mind).

    All we have to know is how to use this weapon right. We can either defend ourselves using it or destroy ourselves.

    Great one.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    This is amazing and true