The Scrubbing Woman

by Chad B   May 22, 2014


A woman tries to wash a spot of bird poop off of her otherwise shiny car.
She scrubs and scrubs, but the poop remains.
Growing frustrated, she tries harder, neglecting to rinse her rag.
As the rag gets dirty, the flecks of dirt trapped within it begin to damage the clear coat of the car.

Still she scrubs.

The clear coat, becoming ever thinner, is now completely gone in some places.
As she scrubs, ever obsessively, without rinsing her rag, she begins damaging the paint.

Still she scrubs.

The paint is now chipped and scratched. The bare metal is starting to show through.
It will rust and deteriorate, and look awful, all because she was obsessed with cleaning one small speck of poop.

Still she scrubs.

I am the woman.
My rag is vodka and the car is my soul.

Still I scrub.

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  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I was not expecting this... I wasn't sure where you were going with the woman and her cleaning her car. It was such an ordinary image for the reader to observe. I liked the repetition of "still she scrubs" and it gives such an ominous tone at the end, like this woman is not at peace with herself or has not found purpose yet. The metaphor was powerful and had such depth, impacting the reader with this sense that this is the woman's lifestyle... the alcohol may serve the purpose of forgetting or blurring reality.

    Keep writing, like dust in the wind, you don't even know man (don't even know man) ;D

    And see? This didn't even rhyme, so all the times you tell me a poem has to rhyme, and you didn't even do so.