by Maher May 26, 2014
category :
Life, society /
about society
"Come all, come here, I've something to tell". |
by Marvellous
Distraction, is shared attention. A listener, is good to go. |
by Maher
Thank you Sir :) |
by Darren
Judges comments |
by Maher
Thank you! That's a huge compliment I really appreciate that you read it :) |
by Sylvia
I love the thoughts of the bird being "spoken" and how that bird feels about what it sees and hears and how the bird feels ignored, much like a human would feel. On a technical side, you had used rhymes pretty good until the last 4 lines and there is none. Sort of distracts from the reading. |
by Maher
You're right, I did get lazy toward the end. Got a tad too sleepy that night and the inspiration wore off. Thanks for the feedback :) |