I like how innocent this write is and how honest it feels even in its cliche nature (i hope that does not offend you, but almost all love poems fit that nature in some way or another). You chose a very simple word choice here and even though I prefer more strength when I read, it really fit this piece and it created a voice that i found nothing less than interesting. Well written. Very nicely done.

-M.R.K.

I agree with Adreamer that this piece is a cliche but sometimes that's just how love is. You can lay all of your feelings out on the line and they may sound corny and cliche, but they are true. I can tell this came from your heart and that is the best way to write. Continue to do that and your words will grow stronger with time.

A few suggestions:

First and foremost, use punctuation. You have just one big run-on sentence and it is unpleasant for the reader, it makes it confusing on where to stop and start. Make sentences, use commas where needed, etc. Also make sure when you end a sentence, to capitalize the first letter of the new sentence.

Break your poem into stanzas. Right now you have a block of words, like a paragraph. When you break it down, it will read easier and give off a better visual.

Overall, I understood the feelings you were trying to describe. Keep writing, you can only go up from here! :)

I would nomiate this if i could its so good, wow, i loved it 100/100!!!

That's really beautiful,I love the raw, simplicity of it, the way you say it like it is, it's refreshing to read a down to earth love poem.you really are a romantic from what I can see of your works so far :-)