Intimacy.

by Poet on the Piano   Jun 2, 2014


My right hand, a statue
inches above the coffee mug,
warmed by the steam that
neither loves nor detests me-
wondering if a heart can feel
comfortable, if it can rest
within a set temperature.

If I am ever graced with your heart,
would it banish my coldness or
burn me for my mistakes?

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Written 6/02/14 @ 7:37 PM

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  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Maryanne I am not even sure where to begin with this one. The first stanza does well to make the reader think. What I see is the morning time (with the coffee cup) and you are using a metaphor with the object. I love that. Because the object is the main part of the first half which leads to the heart. The last line is really what got my mind thinking. As it can be interpreted in so many ways. I believe you are saying that your heart is very uneasy and it can become cold or warm.

    The last stanza is beautiful. The way you used both sides of hot and cold or it could be "good or evil". I believe you are saying that your heart is evil or has some kind of hurt. But just know that everyone makes mistakes. I loved how you leave it vague on who this person is. It could be based on religion or god or someone you love deeply. I think there is fear. You fear being judged and that hinders your heart. Beautiful write as you say a lot!.

  • 10 years ago

    by DeviousCharmer

    I like the end how you show that you can be cold . I like how you show you want so badly to feel loved and be in love . would have liked for it to be longer because I want more to the story. but I guess that's when you know it's good when the reader wants more :)