I liked the flow and rhymes scheme of this one a lot better!! With a bit of editing this piece would be awesome! Just need to add an -s to hurt in this line.. "My heart still hurt when I think of you" and I would get rid of the all in this line .. "Do I deserve all this never healing scar?" and the to in this one.. "I'm still thankful you came to my way." Keep up the good work! xo