Each verse made me want more, brilliant! I loved it, such a great read! xo

Amazing.
I wish I could nominate it for the weekly contest.

Judges comments

This is a clever repetitive poem that I could imagine being pacey enough and witty enough, to hold a teenagers attention. A great start that had me marvelling at how such a small stanza with a few very well chosen words could be so imaginative, you picture the scene from the off and follow the journey with every stanza. I love the change in tone and pace after 'and then'. A clever write and worthy of 7 points.

What an awesome poem... I can't believe the flow and the beat to the poem, it is so enjoyable to read. It is a poem that you don't want to be over. I love the reflection scenes how you keep them short and chippy with only a few selectee words, and yet manage to create a deep impact. You list the good and bad things that come to your mind, and you also have a slight hint of a sarcastic/humorous tone to the poem.
I like the layout, and the repetition, worked really well in this case.
I also think you ended the poem really well, building a suspense on waiting on death, and then twisting it into being alive in the end. Even if the tone is still lingering with sadness and emptiness.

Very clever poem. I enjoyed.