The Porthole

The first stanza really captives the emotions and interests me to no belief. I think the line that got to me the most was climbing imagjnery mountains. That was worded so perfectly. And using rapture to contrast it... Is beautiful and it tells me that you had a summer love and you were so high on love that it reached up to the mountain tops. The first and second stanza work very well together as the next scene kind of thing. And the imagery is visually stunning. The rain is a great touch as to me it is very romantic and the two characters kissing under it enhances everything.

The line that stands out on its own works well. Love can be very magical and though you visualize what was in the past .. it was magic in your eyes. I like the snap back to reality here. Though you stayed consistant with the tone and flow of the poems meaning and emotion.

Love to many people can mean many different things. The ending here is great as it shows what you wanted in your life. You seem to have found the love of your life. I do like the porthole title as well because it is such a tiny window but you saw clearly through it enough to see love. That's just my opinion and that's the beautiful thing about poetry. Well done!

In love with this one, Andrea! It flows beautifully and I like how you have such a heartwarming voice in this, sharing this story of the journey of love.

The idea of a "fallen summer" makes me imagine you long for those days in the past, yet you cherish them now and possibly dream of recreating them, looking forward to when you can share moments again with the one you love.

The ending is perfect and I feel you have such a sincere way of expressing to the reader that without any type of dreaming, you would not have found strength or encouragement in each other. Almost like as your voices would have faded, the passion may have too because you did not allow yourselves to dream and hope.

Such a gem :]

I could comment about the content of this poem as I have in the past Andrea but tonight I'm going to focus on the title because I feel it's very significant and may be overlooked by some...a porthole is round and therefore ...nothing can penetrate...so...no matter what tries to infiltrate you feel your circle in complete already and nothing can get in ....I guess it's a dream we all want to live in the end...just my thoughts once more...

So vivid a refreshing poem

Like a lot of your poems this one really speaks volumes to you as a person and the love you share with James, it shows that you are both each others rocks and you need each other to feel complete. I love how you say that you need laughter and dreams in order to keep yourself going, that part of you would be lost without that love you have for each other.

As always, your words are small but powerful...love this x