Another one about the secrets, it does make the reader curious as to what is behind the lines here, with the secrets. It is like she has been through something that no one else will ever know about, and the more she hides it inside, the more she becomes consumed in the darkness.

I think your good at doing the short and choppy layout, it works really well and although the tone was sad, it was still enjoyable to read because of this flow.

Keep writing