Unwritten Death

by cassie hughes   Jun 21, 2014


Unwritten death

The thin line slowly forms beads of red
Almost unnoticed at first
Then gradually building into a trickle, a stream,
Pain hits from nowhere
Building into a crescendo of unbearable agony
I fold over
Suddenly unable to bear my own weight
Confusion wracks my mind,
Where am I?
Why does my body not obey my commands?
My eyes stare, trying to focus.
So many bodies, so much waste,
Is this how it feels to die?
I do not fear death
But I do not wish to embrace it either.
Darkness rushes towards me
Cold fingers squeeze my heart
I feel myself falling and it lasts an eternity.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    The imagery and sense of doom in this are outstanding, Cassie; all delivered with your usual accomplished flow and wording.

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This poem is really deep, and I find myself drawn into it because I can relate to the pain and the emotions within it.

    I got an imagery of self harm in this poem, which I do not know if I picked it up correctly or not, but that is what I got from it. From the opening, the red line and drops of blood. I think straight away this shows the pain inside, and the need for it to be released.

    I think the powerful part is this:

    I do not fear death
    But I do not wish to embrace it either.

    - I think this highlights the true depression and helplessness where we become trapped, we do not want to die, we just know life is a bit unbearable. This is the hardest place to be and I feel you have done a great job portraying your emotions of this here, and how you cope.

    Powerful wording.

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