Favour Of The World

by Maher   Jun 24, 2014


Please world, allow my marriage before you end.
Cast your blunder and multitudes of atrocity aside until the one day that I should marry.
If the history of mankind was but a blink of an eye to you, wait but a fraction more.

World, I beg, grant the wish of a lonely soul.
Let it not go without what it was destined to have.
Have the patience of a good mother, who's feet beneath which lie the gates of heaven.

Proud world, I implore you, continue your spin and gait.
Revolve further more before reaching your resolve.
If time is of the essence, then dilute it with spirits and do not let it evaporate before that day.

Lastly, oh world, hold firm.
You bare a burden hotter than any star and heavier than any mass.
Fall not to your knees by those who oppress you, nay, be strong and trace your orbit.

Shudder not until my day is born,
As there remain some here,
whom you should adore.

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  • 7 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Wow, this is absolutely great, Maher! Asking the world to hold on for you...this is indeed extraordinary because we people live on the belief of the opposite...we hold on for the world. :-)

    • 7 years ago

      by Maher

      Very true and glad you enjoyed it :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Judging comment:

    What stood out to me was how you confronted "the world", asking with conviction and concern in your voice that this world be a foundation for you to grow upon. You have a humble voice here and your requests are so human, for lack of a better word. We all long to love and be loved, to have some confirmation that some things in our lives haven't changed, that they have remained what we know. Such strength in this piece where you guide the world to resolve, hold firm, shudder not. I feel that can be open to interpretation with many situations. Beautifully written and this piece opened my eyes. The stanza that stopped me and made me think the most was the second to last one. That gave me great insight, how true that the world bares such a burden. We question it, tear it down, try to interpret and explain, but what do we always know? I also found hope in this piece, that we must keep waiting and the world must wait with us until that one day where wishes are granted, peace is reached, and there is a time where one can thrive, and not live in darkness. My only suggestion would be to work on the formatting in the first two stanzas as you have a few lines that are longer and don't have as much structure as the last stanza, unless you intended this. This was quite an enriching poem, well done. (10)

    • 10 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you very much. I think your comment is better written than the piece!

      The formatting of the first few stanzas as opposed to the last two was intentional. Humans tend to ask for more when it comes to themselves. The poem begins human, asking for base desires to please oneself. By the end of the poem, a realisation is made, that one's desires can't be fulfilled without the world allowing them to happen - the world needs to be in a better state first. How can a person ask for himself after not giving to the world first? So by the end, he is humbled, and begins to understand that the world also has it's rights and begins to ask for less. His main concern by then is the world that he has neglected to pray for, so out of humility he asks for the one thing that matters, that the world holds firm and is granted its rights before shuddering about his own.

  • 10 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    5/5.Congrats for the win.Enjoyable read.

    • 10 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you Alka, glad you enjoyed it :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    I like the message in this poem. Mankind has done some atrocities to this beautiful world yet nature like a patient mother still holds onto us. I also like the tone of this poem, its sincerity and true feelings as well as the language. A beautiful read and Congratulations on the win!

    • 10 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you very much Meena! I always look forward to your comments :)

      Thanks for the feedback

  • 10 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow! This poem is awesome! I love the language you use, kind of like the old style English and fluent in the sentence, rather than all broken up into new sentences and cliché joining words.

    The meaning and messages inside the poem are quite touching, along with your wording, making this poem very enjoyable to read.

    I like the line in which you beg the world to grant one wish, just one wish for one lonely soul, that really paints a big picture for me, it shows loneliness and how simple it can sometimes seem to find that happiness and comfort.

    The metaphors here are very creative and quite unique for me, such as your star line, baring the burden, that was great! Great imagery!

    Overall, this poem is very well laid out, and I enjoyed reading it.

    Congratulations on your win.

    • 10 years ago

      by Maher

      Thanks very much for giving it a read and for the feedback. You just helped to make my day! :)

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