by Beautiful Soul
I like this. It is very blunt and honest. A lot of people have booty calls and go through this. I like the way you wrote this as well. The wording is great. After midnight is a great line because that's when everyone is usually asleep so anything can happen. A lot of people are a sucker for kindness and want to please another person as well. Anyway this is a nice story overall. |
Simply ravishing beaaaccchhhhh! |
by BlueJay
For not being the kind of poem I generally read it is decent. The intro was decent even though it didn't have too much of an pull the way some of your others have. The underlying disgust at first became the center of this piece and gave this piece a lot more personality. A decently written piece all in all. |