Comments : Confessions: Ninety Days

  • 10 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow, well done you. You certainly got the hang of this!

    I like where you took the story, and how you blended all the prompts in. There was some really great wording in here that I liked, such as:

    heartbeats pounding harder,

    catharsis to your dread,

    drone strikes and carpet bombings

    ... I especially like this line:

    my love is beautifully cruel - I think this is a very powerful point in your poem, and life I suppose. There is a real dark tone in this poem, revenge related too.

    I liked the layout you picked, and I also think the repetition of the ninety days worked well.

    Great job!

    • 10 years ago

      by Kakera

      Thank you!

      This kind of thing with prompts is perfect for me, because they're exactly how I get my inspiration in the first place, often a line in a song or a random sentence.

      The dark tone felt inevitable too. The prompts were too perfect for it, and I've been very bleak in my writing lately. Not sure why that is. But ah, at least I'm writing!

      Thanks!

  • 10 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I really enjoy the dark tone that came of this and I agree it seemed inevitable with the topics at hand. I really enjoy the way you have gone about telling your story and of yourself in these confessions pieces, it lets your audience meet you and fall in love with the way you write at the same time. Though the two I have read thus far seem quite heartbreaking in the fact you can speak of yourself or your muse or whoever it is you write these of they have more love and in cases hope in them as well than I think most are seeing. Because you need to find flaw in order to improve and you need to have just a little pain and or suffering to do much great. So I think not only have you got the hang of these prompt challenges, but you are a fantastic poet in the way you go about seeing the world and yourself (or again, whoever) in a way so unlike the rest of common society or writers. (I sincerely hope that makes sense.)

    Well written.