Drunken Stupidity

I feel like this poem deserves much more recogniztion than it recieved - it's incredibily penned and blends together numerous scenes (bar/club scene, self-reflection, musing) it's truly a shame it didn't receive more comments.

"Bar littered with non sober induced mortals
Blinded with neon lights
Reflected from every mirrored surface"

I think you should change the word 'induced' to 'rendered' or consider rephrasing to something along the lines of "Bar littered with mortals rendered intoxicated', and change 'blinded with' to 'blinded by'. Nevertheless, it's incredible how much imagery you were able to fit into a small amount of lines. It's a true depiction of the club scene - slobbery drunks, excessive blinding lights in every corner. To any sober sane person, it'd be a bit obnoxious, but then again when people are drunk, they tend to lose that inhibition and find things more amusing.

I loved every single stanza here in this poem but this will definitely be my favourite:

"Fights birthing from misunderstandings
Or rather drunken mistakes
Punches flying every which way
Morning come people would realize
Their own idiocy"

It's another image that many people, myself included can relate to. Often times we overlook the stupidity of our actions and focus on what's happening to us, instead of what's happening to others because of our own actions - especially from drunk scenarios, it's harder to acknowledge the fact that you were drunk and made a mistake, because oftentimes people think that it wasn't a mistake, and it was done on purpose (since many believe an intoxicated mind speaks sober thoughts, myself included). I don't know - I just wanted to say I relate this as well, and even though I realize I've done stupid mistakes, I have a hard time 'fessing up to them.

Another well-written poem!

I could visualize different scenarios going on in
the bar and I also like how you have used each prompt to fit into one story...well done.

Thank you for the comment too..take care.

I like the creativity you showed by using the given prompts. Nice write.