Comments : Lost Love

  • 10 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    It's hard to read this piece since I too went through this pain constantly you think of "what ifs" like "what if I had said 'I love you'" would that have changed my outcome from something to nothing? The pain of a love not said hurts a lot more than a love said although both hurt great work hope the heart heals

    -Bet

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I really love how you started this poem out. Taking a chance on love or rescuing someone can be a very difficult task when someone feels depressed. The way you started this out is beautiful because you want to know more about how they saved you. Love seems to always grow everyday... But from the start you can tell its heartbreaking because of the wording you use. I can see this person being hurt so many times that they are afraid to fall in love again and letting go of their hand shows you hesitate on showing your true feelings.

    I personally don't think its ever safe to bury your feelings at all. Because then you might regret it later on. I like the image you capture though. What I see is a girl struggling to let go and in the end they are hurt more so burying their feelings. I really liked the fourth stanza because you show that moment where regret kicks in and they realize that it is too late. This is a great poem because to me you stayed with a good flow and story. Well done.