by -Choke-On-MY-Halo- Jul 24, 2014
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Look beyond my walls |
by BlueJay
This is an interesting piece. It is short and the way the stanzas are kind of messes up your flow a bit, but it is still well written and very unique. I like how much you give away about yourself within this piece, 'im a child at heart' and the walls you've built hopping they'd protect you when really they are just hurting (okay, so "hurting" may not be the best way to say it, but I hope you understand what I mean). Your voice really shines in this piece and it is well written. Nice job |