by Darren Aug 12, 2014
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
I wonder is a cloud really lonely |
by mossgirl19
It's funny I left a comment here two years ago... Didn't even know i did. How the clouds inspire beautiful pieces to be created. |
by mossgirl19
A pea on the kitchen floor...I loved it. It's so true. |
by Natalie
I don't have anything bad to say. Nicely done. |
by Darren
Thanks Natalie |
by Beautiful Soul
Nature having feelings is really an interesting thing in poetry. I love your thoughts about it. The flow and story are great as well. The no punctuation work well to me because the story connects. It really is a good question on whether or not the earth is really lonely when the sun is not shining or is blocked by the clouds. Well played with that. It makes so much sense to me though. People tend to be happier when the sun is out so why not nature? My favorite stanza is the flower one because that truly plays into the emotional side of the poem. And the ending is lovely too. You go back to the original statement and answer the statement with a question or a passing thought. How can something be lonely with nothing yet everything it can see. Well done |
by Darren
Thanks again, great comment |
by Baby Rainbow
The sun yearning to burn a way through |
by Darren
Thanks saffs, I have changed the spelling. |