The sun yearning to burn a way through
as the flowers droop solemly
praying for light to lift them again

- solemnly*

Quite a thought provoking, deep poem, especially for one that came from a wild card spur of the moment type.

I like the idea of using the sky, to portray loneliness, but then just how much is in the sky, even when we feel it looks empty.

Also, really like the comparison to the pea being lost on the kitchen floor, this is like finding a needle in the haystack saying, but to use a pea, which is well known metaphor for describing something so small, is a very clever idea.

I like how you have inserted questions through out the poem from start to finish, almost like you are speaking to the reader, and then expecting them to answer... (although there was no punctuation, or question marks!) Lol. Sorry, had to point that out at some time or other ;)

But seriously, I like this, and I like how you have used wandering in your title, and then wondering, in your opening line. This worked really well and showed the two different meanings in the word.

Great job.

Nature having feelings is really an interesting thing in poetry. I love your thoughts about it. The flow and story are great as well. The no punctuation work well to me because the story connects. It really is a good question on whether or not the earth is really lonely when the sun is not shining or is blocked by the clouds. Well played with that. It makes so much sense to me though. People tend to be happier when the sun is out so why not nature? My favorite stanza is the flower one because that truly plays into the emotional side of the poem. And the ending is lovely too. You go back to the original statement and answer the statement with a question or a passing thought. How can something be lonely with nothing yet everything it can see. Well done

I don't have anything bad to say. Nicely done.

A pea on the kitchen floor...I loved it. It's so true.
5/5

It's funny I left a comment here two years ago... Didn't even know i did. How the clouds inspire beautiful pieces to be created.