by Darren Aug 12, 2014
category :
Life, society /
meaning of life
Clouds |
by Beautiful Soul
Why so serious son? This is a great poem to me. Smoking is not a health habit at all. I like the form. Love the lay out. Each line seems to hold a different statement about why smoking is terrible. Almost like a list in a way. Great job with the wording and syllable count. You seemed to push yourself more so than usual. Back to my first little joke. This poem has a very serious tone to it. Almost like a personal message to someone you care about or even yourself. The ending holds such a sarcasm. Using "fun" really throws the reader off in a good way :). Loved that tone. Excellent write. |
by Darren
Thanks, I thought I would change a shambles of a poem into an etheree |