Wowwowow!

Nominated! <3

Will be back for a proper comment. :)

I am always a fan of using nature and romance or sadness in poems. You can play around with it so much. Okay the first stanza, wow. Memories are always difficult to deal with when you feel sadness. The details here are flawless though. I sense coldness for this person because they seemed like they were pushing you away. The broken kiss tells me that. Or I think it could be interpreted as a person who is far away that you miss but talk to sometimes and you imagine what it would be like if they were there with you. Also it seems like he was a very unique and different then anyone else you met. But beautiful all at the same time. The ending holds sadness and bliss at the same time. Bliss is the imagination of being together but sadness is that you are not at all. Excellent write.

The wording in this poem is outstanding! So good to see you writing again.

The title itself is very catching and made me want to read it fast!

your metaphors are so unique, and descriptive, you really do show the reader what you want them to see, and not just tell it. a trick which is very hard to master sometimes within poetry, and I think this poem really highlights what a difference it can make. Such a vivid poem.

seen and the fear of hypothermia
flocked south for the year.

- I loved this idea, again, very unique. I had never heard anything like this being used before and your portrayed the distance very clearly with this metaphor.

I also think the ending of the poem was one of those powerful ones which didn't seem rushed or flawed. It merely summed the poem up, and that memories can arise and replay in your mind, at any moment.

I really also like how you use the snowflake to portray this person leaving, "melting away" what a powerful line to imagine.

There was just so much powerful lines and wording in this poem, it was all good!

Good luck.

:)

Yay! I'm so glad this won, Congrats! :D

The title is amazing, it definitely draws the reader in.

The winter theme is stunning and the imagery throughout the entire piece is flawless. These are memories of when you spent a winter with this person. You recall every single detail and to me, that is what makes the poem.

The first stanza sets the wintry scene. You remember your ears reddening from the arctic wind, the way the northern air smelled (which possibly means that you traveled to be with this person??), the texture of the couch and how it would leave marks upon your back when you two was laying together, and then then something happened, the broken anticipation of the kiss... it stayed with you even after months had passed by.

The second stanza holds a lot of imagery and wonderful metaphors as well. The relationship had turned cold, you kept trying to warm it up any way you could but they would just continue to push you away.

" fear of hypothermia
flocked south for the year."

-I'm so jealous that you thought of this first!!! I'm in love with that metaphor! <3 <3 <3

The snowflake metaphor is wonderful, as well. He showed up unexpectedly in your life, but only stayed briefly. He melted away too quickly.

The ending is perfect. You will always associate this person with the winter, his voice like the crunching of snow beneath your feet. You're glad that you chose to travel to spend this brief time with him, it is a memory you will always cherish.

Wonderful work! :)

Beautiful. I love the imagery you have used here. The idea of love as a snowflake is particularly good. Great write. :)

This is a beautiful poem

Such stunning imagery,I love the metaphor of winter you've used and maintained throughout the poem :-)

Judging Comment:

I read this poem again and again and each time it got me
more involved with the writer's emotion. Each stanza
holds memory, feelings and all the senses involved at that
time which made it so vivid and alive. What stood out for me
the most is the second stanza. I also like how love was weaved
with season and in this case the cold winter, a simple snowflake.
Beautifully penned...beautifully sad.

Judging comment:

A very nostalgic piece. Simply challenging the idea of it snowing in the middle of summer gives the reader a chance to imagine the unthinkable, and what else that may be beyond what we know as normal. I love how much balance you have in this piece, especially in remembering and cherishing the certain images you choose to recall. I can taste the fresh air and envision the trust you had in this person, from the closeness and the yearning to be with them each day. Beautiful wording. I also like the comparison of the mouth of the furnace to this person's heart. You have an eloquent though refreshing way of writing that you are trying to stay warm, and it's like the cold is unfamiliar to you both for awhile. The third stanza reminds me of the crafts we used to do in grade school of making snowflakes, and how each one had a different shape, displaying how unique we all are. This person graced your life in an unusual, unexpected way, and you can still feel their presence lingering. A cozy poem. I like how it is still remembrance in the last stanza, yet I feel you hold no regret, that you wouldn't trade that dedication and bond for anything... however this person exited your life, or even if you can't see them again until a certain time, you have this connection with winter because you know that time is spent with this person, and your soul can find warmth, shelter, rest. (7)