by JaneDoeWrites Aug 22, 2014
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
Once upon a time |
by Em
Wow wow wow. I loved this, it's beautiful and really worked well together, just everything fitted nicely like an amazing book you can't put down it gripped me from start to finish because of your words and structure. |
by BlueJay
Again, so much has already been said, but I feel the need to dissect this anyway - I hope that is alright with you. |
by Ben Pickard
Wonderful imagery throughout. Thoroughly good. |
This is awesome. |
I'm so guilty of laughing right now, I'm so sorry! I love what you did to the poem it's nothing bad trust me it's a truly wonderful idea that you could manage to change the poem into what you wanted. I have to say the poem is so true, God I'm laughing so badly as I type this. Prince Charming is never coming to any girl unless she finds him by accident nobody is going to wake us up from a comatose state just because they find us that is the reality. The poem itself flowed flawlessly, the imagery (I'm guilty of laughing really badly) is hilarious but in a spectacular way! The emotions are so good! It's like a teacher telling you the truth and not sugarcoating ANYTHING this is what I would tell my daughter I think I need your permission to have this poem on my wall because it's so going to go on my daughter's wall one day. That's gonna be my lesson to her and I'll say "mommy got this poem years ago with the permission of her friend" and just teach her not to trust love. What I love and love and love is the fact you started with "Once upon a time" and used it so beautifully that I'm so happy this is one of the last poems I'll read Crystal 5/5 |
Wow, thanks for the amazing comment Mori! Haha it's funny that you'd display it on your daughters wall but by all means. There's been a cultural shift since most of these fairy tales were written, and things are quite different now. Thank you again for this comment. It made me smile (: |