Connecting

Wonderful write !!!! Beautiful scene roved in the head on reading this piece.

Sweet and innocent, I have actually dreamed of this lol. This image also reminds me of "A Walk to Remember" where Landon names a star after Jamie.

Ugh! This poem is wonderful, as it could be a senryu as well, because of the first line. But wow!

First line- This is a great set up line and pretty good imagery too. Two young lovers could go a lot of ways here, high school sweethearts? Probably. But the emotions here are romantic, and what are they gazing at? For me you did an excellent job in making the reader curious and want to read more of the poem. To see what they are gazing at.

Second line- The flow leads nicely to this line! And again tempts the reader to keep going, why are they whispering? The breeze definitely adds a nice touch here though. It could be a cool afternoon or a warm breezy night!

Third line- This is the aha line! Perfect, because it answers the first two questions. Whispering because they are naming, and gazing at the stars. Also want to say, there was no "location" per say but the night time is enough to keep it open, but vague enough to keep the reader guessing. Love this!!

Edit- Oh I forgot to mention the title, perfect! Because they are connecting with each other while connecting the stars, so it definitely works both ways!