Temptation Echoes

I needed this today. I understand this. you have perfectly created a situation so many people relate to, especially with the current state of things.

Your title choice is excellent and your opening stanza left me speechless. I reread it three or four times before reading the complete piece. I am glad i did because each time I saw something in a different way or i found things i missed before. Each stanza had a separate voice to it almost, but I kind of liked that effect because it gave so much more meaning to the piece. to the point you are trying to get across.

The story you told was excellent and I like how you made the scene so vivid without saying very much about anything at all. Your conclusion was great.

another fabulous write.

Title: Love this!!!! Temptation can be interpreted in so many ways and having it echo leads to believe that thoughts are lingering. Pushing you toward something.

First- Faces and eyes can tell a story that only you hold deep inside. Love the imagery here as well. Mirror reflections are a good way to describe how you are feeling and gives the readers a view point. Desperation is a great word to show fear. Nice set up!

Second- I like this stanza for the fact that it leads from the first. You show that desperation with the knife or blade as you say. This person was clean but now something happened to make them feel sad again. Sweaty fingertips is a great line as well, it adds so much to the imagery and tells me this person is nervous, because that feeling has not been felt in a while.

Third- You are the only one who can control yoursrlf yes. What will happen next? Who knows. But it makes the reader want to know more. It's like a "cliff hanger" in the middle of the poem. Great job there.

Fourth- Yes for a moment those feelings will disappear but then it will get worse over time. I love that you had the realization. That achievement of being sober is not easily earned. So why throw it all away when you can be happy.

Fifth- Love the end! Trembling hands and the realization make you drop the blade because you are stronger than you realize at first. No temptation can control you. This message is strong and very well written!