Comments : Angelic Devil

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Title: ugh! That is great. It leaves the readers mind curious to see what you are going to do next or what the poem will be about.

    First- Nature in poetry is well used here. It seems like you are comparing how you feel to a night. The sun and the stars are the light you once has but they were pulled out of your life.

    Second- Love the wording here, especially with shadows and tears. The feelings you give are great. There could also be a deeper meaning here. Shadows could be the dark circles under your eyes and tears are the thoughts that overwhelm you. Home is a place you feel safe. But it seems like there is no home in your life, but you are looking and cannot find anything.

    Third- you stumble and fall over the depression you feel. Everything is now destroyed, all the happiness you had is gone. The memories of your past keep haunting you. This is a great write and great job getting your feelings out!