I like this piece, there is a very simple feel to it and yet your point gets across well and your theme is well developed. I think it would fit better in the life category though, if I may say so. Anyway, Awesome write Zoei, the only thing I would suggest is reformatting the piece or trying to give it some "shape". Because right now just being words sort of distracts your flow and makes it a little more difficult for the reader to follow. (I still have this problem from time to time too, or I would suggest a solution.)

Anyway, great write :)