Lunar Water

This poem is out of this world unique, creative and breathtaking. I was so captivated by its metaphoric beauty and then so deeply saddened by the message. Beautifully heartbreaking is the phrase I use for this poem by Hellon. It's incredible.

The first line is one of the most powerful first lines I have read in years... its mixed with devastation and beauty... Racism, greed, and death, while mother moon dies... Oh I can't express my love for this powerful, world tragic poem... Just mind blowing!!

What a relevent poem for the times this word is having. I'm in agreement with saffie, the title is very unique and eye catching. The perspective of the moon is unlike I have ever seen. My interpretation of the poem is: The moon cried (rain) after it was "shot". As in no one would notice that something so relevant was suffering. The moon could be a metaphor for the world, or people nowadays. No one can see the other perspective of a person, because they are so blinded by their choices. Freedom of speech is not really free anymore it seems. The ending is very powerful though. Personal feelings always get in the way of what's right and wrong, and who knows who deserves to die or not. Great poem! 5/5

Love it. XD 5/5

Wow, such powerful words and descriptions here. In a way, it is quite relevant that I read this today because of Scotland right now, and a lot of the emotions in this poem reminded me of the debate people are having.

I think the opening of the poem was strong in that you created a shooting, yet no one noticed it. It states so strongly that people seem to ignore their world, and what goes on inside of it.

The ending of your first stanza was what reminded me of the debates going on over here. It seems that all that was in focus was freedom of speech, yet, you could only speak and have your thoughts accepted, if it was the same as the other person's beliefs.

for reasons
long forgotten.

- this really stood out for me. I think it goes to show how the world still fights through habits, and through pressure to do so, (even people, such as families/friends) that they no longer remember the reasons the fight began, they no longer care about the reason either, they just get caught up in the fighting.

I loved the ending of the moon shedding tears, and hoping that they would fal upon the world he sees in chaos, hoping to be noticed.

Very sad ending, because a very few minority would notice.

Excellent title choice.
Well done.