Comments : The World is a Shallow Place

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Indeed it is a very nice poem full of so much truth about how this world is..

    But its like a haystack without a needle

    Hmm...or maybe for that above sentence you might be trying to say...

    Finding a needle in the haystack...

    And although , well,.i guess you used needle to rhyme the sentences...but needle and people don't really rhyme...and well if they do, my bad I just don't see it...

    • 9 years ago

      by Sandstorm

      Thanks a lot for the nice feedback.
      I did compromise the rhyming scheme a little to fit this line, and it's interesting that you aren't the only one to have picked up on this. I was basically alluding to the idiom "finding a needle in the haystack" to relate to my frustration at the situation, but at the same time trying to give a feeling of helplessness and inevitability by saying that there was nothing to find. Glad you enjoyed it though :) Unfortunately don't know hindi as I'm from a french speaking country. Thanks again :)

  • 9 years ago

    by gumshuda

    Ooh i'm sorry...i just assumed you to be from India because of your name :p
    My bad..

    • 9 years ago

      by Sandstorm

      That's ok, I have indian ancestors I think :)