Lovely poem.the title immediately stole my attention and the poem itself lived up to the expectation of it's title.just a friendly query, the first line is, for want of a better word, sightly ambiguous, in that you state that your happiness is futile (pointless), then you follow that statement with the words"WHICH appears..."you see the situation here? The word which, throws the reader off because it does not connect with either the former, or the latter statements.perhaps it's a typo and it's meant to read "my happiness is FUTILITY, |
by Everlasting
Well done, you described how your happiness is to you. In your poem, you said a lot more but Forgive me, right now, I feel like reading and not much into the commenting.P.s. I believe that with "which" you are referring to your "happiness." Hence, describing it. The poem actually comes off as optimistic. |
by redxiii
Excellent poem I really like the word usage. Great job. |