The Naturalist

by JaneDoeWrites   Oct 3, 2014


"I'm so tired of performing
in the pageantry of vanity,
and conforming to this
accepted form of digital
insanity."

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My heart yearns
for your face to be
unpixelated and within
arms reach, instead of
mine being illuminated
by this screen while reciting
your voiceless words,
imagining how they
would sound coming
from your mouth.. but
this room remains
muted.

Extract these digital
syringes from my
dehydrated veins.

My soul is craving
the wild, the feel of
bark on the soft side
of my hands; it craves
to connect to an intuitive
hotspot, where I could
repaint the canvas of
my life in earthy tones
and harmonize with
a canary's song.

Mother,
extract these artificial
syringes from my
arid veins,

I am thirsty for life.

*A/N: Inspired by a video from Prince Ea titled "Anti-social Network".*

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  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    So much has already been said about this piece, I wish I had found it sooner. I love it. I wish it had won, if it ever got nominated at all - because it really is wonderful. Fantastic job.

  • 10 years ago

    by WW

    Hi, where did the first stanza come from? It starts this poem off beautifully. It's wierd how I'm responding to this on a smart phone and yet I relate with what this piece is feeling. I'm inspired to write about something similar. I don't have any valuable feedback though, I loved it and think it's perfect. Thanks for this!

    • 10 years ago

      by JaneDoeWrites

      You can see at the bottom I noted the author Prince Ea. Look up the video by the name titled "anti social network"

  • 10 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Judging comment:

    Such a devout tone in this piece. I love how you emphasize that distance between nature and yourself. Indeed, there always seems to be something in our way, a barrier, an electronic screen, masking nature's true and unfiltered beauty. Your word choice here is fantastic such as "digital syringes" and the mention of veins. "deydrated" should be "dehydrated" though. Never would have thought of a pairing like that! Also, in the second to last stanza, should "canaries" be "canary's" since you are referring to that one song? I think the ending line works so well on its own because after sharing your heart and your simple desires, what you want to feel and hear, that thirst remains. That one human thirst we all have to be connected with life on a much more substantial level. We all seek to be satisfied and for some merely reflecting within nature's presence is enough. I have not watched the video you refer to and were inspired by, but I will have to sometime soon. Thanks for sharing. (7)

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Wow crystal, I'm blown away by this. Simply this poem seems to be about getting back in touch with something you love which is nature, to help you heal from a past hurt that happened. Using art to capture nature is brilliant honestly. It makes a lot of people connect to the piece well. To me this has created a peaceful atmosphere within its structure. As in the flowing of words is smooth and beautiful to read but they connect well. The ending line is powerful hon. It leaves a mystery shrouding it that makes the reader think a lot. To me it is saying that you are thirsty for learning new things about yourself and what life has in store for you. Beautiful, brilliant. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Dancing Rivers

    Absolutely brilliant!!!!I have no words except, what a masterpiece!!!! If I could nominate poems I would nominate this one, but the closest I can do is mark it as a favourite :-)

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