I absolutely adore this write. It offers such fanastic imagery, I felt as if I were sitting in a booth myself watching her walk by. I pictured a retro diner and this timeless beauty working there waiting to catch her big break, but this piece had a refreshing new twist on an age-old idea. I am impressed with the writers use of music throughout the piece. The usage of the word 'demon' here implies to me that she is sultry, dark and mysterious- that there is more to her than meets the eye hiding under her uniform. The ending was flawless and unrushed.

Great write dear! 5/5

I would love to meet this dame! O my God so beautiful the poem You described a young woman or any waitress actually they have to endure so much for either their kids or for themselves I hope it gets nominated because if I could I would nominate it it's just so beautiful and true (probably not for all women who are waitresses) 5/5

-Mori

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This really is a detailed and wonderfully original write that had me mesmerized throughout. I love the use of metaphor throughout this piece.
Well done and all the very best,
ben

I feel that way already and she hasn't waited on me. Sounds like she would make forget I was hungry. Good job!