Let me first say this: this is not a poem it's a paragraph. Now that we have stated the obvious let me start with what I like in this poem: I love the message you gave off in this paragraph it was very blunt very in your face but truthful so don't worry about that sweetie. What I didn't like was the obvious fact it wasn't in a poem form, didn't have capitulation, nor the proper grammar like commas where they needed to be, but besides that like I said I loved the message that it gave off and I love the last sentence in this because we are the end since we are the beginning of every chaos made to man. Nice job

-Mori