Comments : This Is Me

  • 10 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    Even if I could
    And I can
    I wouldn't stop hurting
    It's just who I am
    Who I've become
    Who I masochisticly choose to be
    ^
    Nice way to start a poem with a sizzling stanza! It just says to me that you like pain and I am smilling right now since I used to be that way to be honest I loved pain and I choose it it's just one of those dumb times where you wanted to stand out to anyone but this is very nice and it leads the reader to want to read more and also continues to connect to the whole poem as welll. Favorite stanza of all that I've ever read!

    The self loather
    Creator, destroyer, the Messiah
    God of my own life
    Crooked, scarred and broken
    The road lost to my own twisted nature
    Paved with dust filled memories
    ^
    It descibes the person and how messed up and how they think they are thier own gods but it mostly describes who they are and they can't seem to find a way out of their misery because they choose not to and their lack of character nice middle stanza

    My skin is made of emotion
    Raw and untamed
    Eyes and lips, drenched in truth
    Soul of fire and vice
    Heart and mind
    A battleground for love and hate

    ^
    Ah you finally described how the person looks like it left me chills on my skin it truly did my favorite line in this stanza is the last line because we always battle our love for a person the hatred we feel for that same person it's complicated to even begin to explain but still truly perfectly made poem! 5/5

    -Mori