I would suggest commas as there is a lot of words in this beautiful poem and period it helps the poet know when one thought goes into another sentence as well. Take some words out from some lines since I have to go and re-read the line again I would suggest for you to go to Microsoft Word and see if the grammar is correct and if it is then awesome and if not I'm sure you can make it more beautiful (trust me any poet can make their poems twice as beautiful if they want to no matter that the first may have mistakes in it). Didn't see any rhyming which was a shame since this a sad poem but the rhyming would've made it stunning. Love the imagery and the emotions the flow is fine but like any poem (no matter who the poet is) could be better hun. That being said nice poem and I really love the repetion of some words just don't try to use the same words too much since there are millions of words in a dictonary! 5/5

-Mori

Sorry hun I didn't see it maybe I was too tired