Blinking Away Time (Haiku)

This is a pretty good haiku saffie, with the first line the reader can definitely imagine an cool autumn day. The wind is breezy and the colors are shining bright. Yes it is between summer and winter, so that tells me there are some days that are cool and some a little bit warmer. The last line is nice as well, I believe it is saying that that time goes by so fast and within a short time you don't realize how much it has passed. This is a nice haiku because you did a good job with the structure and wording, but I agree with hellon here too, I think it would read better as "life blinking through time" because that is the message of the poem, of how time goes fast and if we don't stop and wonder we will miss it. 5/5

This is a nice little haiku you have here Saffie. Very thought provoking. I wonder what you think of changing the last line to life blinking through time? There was a member on here who always told me to try to cut out all the little filler works when writing short forms and it's always stuck in my head. Just thought I'd share it with you haha!!!