by Beautiful Soul
The simplistic wording of this poem is well used. Love is a language that can be shown and said in many forms. Here the simplest of acts are shown a massage. And you have known this person for so long that you can tell when something is deeply wrong, I am definitely the same way. His thoughts are racing and with that he cannot speak clearly about what is bothering him. Eyes can speak the loudest as they show all the different emotions that one is feeling, like here they could be in a panic or sad. And you are the only one who can speak in the same tongue as them, because you know this person well enough to do so. This person needed you to lean on. Sometimes words don't need to be said because your love is there for them always. I live this poem Hannah, because it shows how much love can really heal a soul. Great job! |
One night, when the countdown |
by Baby Rainbow
Hannah this is truly beautiful, I really love it! |
by BlueJay
This piece is amazing so congrats on the well deserved win. I love how even with such a simple piece you managed to write something with such depth, importance and personality. The way you decided to tell this story is wonderful and a beautiful combination of style and your own voice so wonderful job with that. this is the kind of piece that people can always relate to one day, whether its a friend, sibling, or love everyone gets their chance to be needed loved and comforting. the final two stanzas completely blew me away, the way they wrapped everything up without giving too much detail was beautiful. |
by Kate
I love the simplicity of the poem. It's short but packs a punch. And I think that both really play into the beauty of the poem. |
by ReeLeeV
I really enjoyed this! The intimacy between the narrator and her guy was beautiful!! |
by Baby Rainbow
This poem really took me into one moment in time and really made that moment into a big scene. This is a great talent to have while writing poetry, to be able to show that very small moment, and make it big and vivid for a stranger to understand. It shows an early morning rise of a couple who have not slept because the man's anxiety has filled the room, and his partner is aware there is trouble brewing inside his mind. What I really like about the wording of this poem is that the narration comes from only the female, and yet she makes the poem about her partner and how she understands his silence. We learn about him, through her words and observations. It is a beautiful poem capturing the meaning of love, and how being there is sometimes needed more, than having to do something or say something. A simply precious write. |
This is beautiful written and so much truth to it. At times when we are going through rough times all we really need is to feel the presence of someone close to us. They don't need to say anything but they sure provide this great comfort. |