What a truly powerful write!

You really use a good mixture of metaphors here and I love how you have described that feeling if losing control, and how it seems to disappear everywhere except to the places you need it to be! Comparing it to a snake was a really great technique, then going on to describe the snake leaving the room, almost sniggering like it had stolen from you and then casually walked away!

Brilliant write!

Welcome to the site too!