by Hellon
This is such a sad poem. Sad why? Because it's true. Man is very selfish and uncaring when it comes to nature...if there's a profit to be gained. Whether clearing a forest by logging or just burning it out if they want the land then little thought is put into how old these trees etc are. I love how you have taken on the voice of the tree...sadly, I still think it will continue in the name of progression. |
by Beautiful Soul
Yayyy I am glad you wrote again as well. And agreed with hellon very sad, when it comes to the day when trees of forests have to be burned. I do like the story you used here as well. A lot of times this happens to a lot of kids. Where they just watch their family parish from the greed or stupidy of man or I guess humans in general. The view point is also great because it shows real fear to see your family die. The imagery is disturbing but true, because this seems to happen all the time in the animal kingdom. Like I said I loved the view point you used because the "narrator" seems to be all the different animals but all in one voice. Anyways great write. 5/5 |
by ah satan 666
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by ddavidd
Actually I disagree. That man is very nice man , he is a good provider, he cooks your food, worms your house, runs the engine of life, exedra. I think you brother and sister must have done something to anger him like that. |
by Liz
Maybe they did.. just maybe. Plus, no man provides for me, or cooks my food, or....what's worming a house? Are you volunteering to worm my house? |
by Maple Tree
I just love this poem. Well deserved win, congratulations! |
by Rusheena
This is a very strong piece! You truly convey the destruction of man towards wildlife in this tragic scene. Even though I read the title, I was still convinced that you were talking about people, and that made it all the terrifying to know that humans are the ones responsible for destroying an innocent "family" who only invited them into their home. You did an awesome job! Favorited :) |
by Maple Tree
Hands down one of the TOP Nature poems on this site to date. |
by Liz
Thank you, sunny. That means a lot <3 |
by Meena Krish
I had a family once. |
by Naughtymouse
I really like nature poetry, I have ready many poems on this subject and genuinly, this is awesome! especially how you control the readers tempo by the way you layed out the piece. I love how you personalised this, to family, brothers & sisters, very provoking and emotional. |
by BlueJay
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by Baby Rainbow
This poem really touches on the sad truth of nature, and how many humans continue to treat it with such disrespect, and uncaring. I think the personification in this poem is truly outstanding, really making that tree so real, it could probably be read and taken as a humans view of a bad upbringing too. The title was so strong and really drew that poem to pinpoint such a disaster that happens more and more these days, and also to highlight the ending of the poem with the word "massacre" what a really powerful image to end on. A really fantastic poem, really creative blend of sadness, truth and nature. |