Comments : Try Me

  • 10 years ago

    by -Choke-On-MY-Halo-

    I'll come back and comment on this poem later I promise

    -Mori

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Wow, wow, wow. This needs more views because it deserves them. I love that even throughout the pain you show optimism and inspiration.

    It's not normal
    I don't cry and wet my tee,
    I just look at the mirror
    And said "Try Me"
    ^^
    Love this last stanza as it's filled with optimism of not crying but asking the world to try you and they will but we get over it because we're stronger.
    I think 'said' should be 'say" though.

    All in all fantastic.
    Em

    • 8 years ago

      by sera

      Im still learning so thank you ^^

      ive edited the part, thanks again ^^

  • 5 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello.
    I know this is an older poem, but I like this rhyming style. It suits your words.
    I hope your mirror helps.