by Everlasting
I can hear the beat! This piece may benefit with some editing. There were a few lines that made me pause. Some extra words got on the way of eyes. They felt like tiny rocks that hit me hard. I was about to cry, but then I found my way through the lines, and until then I started to feel the rhythm. The rhythm this piece has. I love that. |
The emblence here sounds sad feelings, owing to the lost of an E-friend. I love the contradiction set in this lines "..... The wetness of pain, the severe drought. You are like a tornado...... Keep the pen alive my friend. |