by Everlasting
Edited: I like it. This is something to give thought |
by nouriguess
:) |
by Baby Rainbow
This is so short and great! The flow you hold is amazing, it is so enjoyable to read. |
I would add a question mark at the end since it is implied? Up to you as the author though. Interesting how the parenthesis worked, it gave the reader more insight into your thoughts and it was neat how a mind can be "static", like unfixed, no change. One other suggestion is to have the line "I started to decay" on a separate line or add ellipses to the end of it? |
That is a beast of a poem. It's almost like the ending of the poem was played out as precisely as the beginning. That is very hard to achieve. |
by Rohit Sapra
I guess everyone matters for somebody. Even though it is true that the outer world is really cruel. |
by earlgreytea
Agreed. :) |