Comments : Death Row House

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Immense emotions fill this poem with raw wording and feelings. You did an excellent job showing the view point of this house. While I was reading this I felt like a person was talking to me. The details here are well scripted and each line holds a different image that would stand well on it's own let alone all the stanzas you connected together. Comparing a house to act like it has feelings is something I have never seen or even thought about before, but it does make sense, so much so actually. The house itself holds the most memories, because sometimes even before you or another family to move in,it holds memories of the past. You'd never expect a house to be vibrant or have emotions, but you did an excellent job in making the reader feel sad at the end when the house feel alone. Great write, nominated. .

  • 9 years ago

    by CuteThingsGoneWrong

    I agree with BS, The emotion here is from a person...

    I love the feeling that this house used to be a home for many family over the years but now.. It lingers alone. Waiting for someone else to live in it.. That it loved the fact that it could provide to someone (it reminds of me a father providing for his wife, then for his children, then his grandchildren but as time went on could no longer provide and his family has either left him or died... I guess im a little cryptic but eh.) and towards the end how he is now wishing he could provide like he used to. THen towards the end how he wonders what will happen to his memories (the memories being the house) when it taken apart and destroyed.

    I love this poem. Amazing use of the prompt

  • 9 years ago

    by Zabadak

    Really like this too, Saffie! Very different!

  • 9 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Once again you knocked the prompt out of the park! I love the title so much! This house is now on death row, just awaiting to be executed. Wonderful idea.

    Throughout this house's lifetime, countless frames of happy moments have been hung on it's walls. They displayed them proudly, proud of it's "family".

    "I have witnessed new life
    as it grows inside of me,
    and I have mourned
    as the same life departs me. "

    ^ I love the personification here. It's almost like this house is a mother... it has witnessed new life growing within...thrilled to have a growing family live with them ... only to mourn the loss of that same family when they decide to move.

    They feel abandoned, unwanted and depressed due to that fact that so many families have lived here yet none decide to stay. It's an endless cycle of love and loss.

    Lately, silence has been the only company in the walls of this house. The windows are all boarded up now. Over the years, this house has deteriorated, it's growing older and is now beyond repair. All this house has time for is to sit and recall the good memories, wondering what will happen to them when it's date to be demolished comes.

    The personification is beautiful and reminds me of life itself... of an older person pondering on all of their good memories before they pass.

    Beautiful, touching write. Nominated!

  • 8 years ago

    by silvertung69

    Challenging way to have someone create. and i have to say,
    you pulled it off. i even forgot you were a house for a sec. lol