by BlueJay
I like the paragraph style stanza followed by a single isolated line as the conclusion, but it is well penned and the honesty here is wonderful. You truly created the scene in a way that worked not only beautifully but easily because it is detailed without taking away the reader's ability to apply it to their own memories. I like that you incorporated pieces of your conversation with person and the scene. The style is unique in its own way and I love how you weren't trying to conform to the typical "rules" of poetry. |
So different and probably to a lot of people would not be called 'a poem' but it has such a poetic flow and style that I would beg to differ. |
by Baby Rainbow
Oh, this is beautiful and so warm and romantic! |