Seriously? I leave for 5 minutes and this is what you do? I like the descriptions and images though, you chose some decent words for the scene. I also like the way you went about straying from your usual use of vocabulary. I enjoyed the way you went about saying exactly what you wanted to say and nothing more or less. Very well done.

Interesting piece over all, it fits well as prose but as I will always say, it could use some "true" format.

This is a sweet little write to my maddy-o-so. I should tell you to keep your eyes off of her... but that is kinda difficult to do since you are her boyfriend, even though there is still no bird house in my lacking front yard for all those poor homeless feathered creatures ;)