Dear friend I have some tragic news to tell you honey, you have so many errors on your poem hon I would go back and recheck your poem, because if I went into detail you would cringe because that's how many errors you have on your wonderful poem, the concept was there, the emotions were there and boy did I love the message of the poem but the tiny errors can mess up even the most stunning poem made. Either way I enjoyed the read but I wish you could go back and fix the poem. Here's a tip it's commas, some words like "every" should be "ever", and just fix that honey and you'll be golden! 5/5

-Mori

Ok I think I fixed all my mistakes sometimes I just get so caught up in my writing and what I'm trying to feel my message and everything I forgot to check myself and I appreciate it when people point out my mistakes and makes me a better writer. If you would please go through and check to make sure I fixed everything thank you bunches Lilly :)