by Everlasting
This word "liquid" made me feel like it didn't belong in the poem. That's just my opinion though |
by Karla
Beautiful, my friend! |
by nouriguess
The conversation between the mother and daughter brought me to tears. Probably because a few days ago, I listened to a similar conversation. The girl was begging her mom to buy her a small Christmas tree, and the mother kept saying "no, we can't afford that". So heartbreaking to know that those kids know all about war and guns, and nothing about joy. |
Would there be a time when festivities are not buried in the tomb of human intolerance. |
by Baby Rainbow
What a really touching write, very realistic conversation, and I can imagine the scene, and the terrifying pain the mother holds inside about the future for herself and her daughter. What a tragedy you have portrayed. |
by uttAm
Wow....such a great write, i almost got tear in my eyes after reading this. Truly amazing! |
by BlueJay
Judging Comment; |
by Baby Rainbow
This poem holds such a sad story, but one that you cannot stop reading, it is like a scene in a film that you rewind to watch again because it so moving. The poem is based around a conversation between mother and daughter, who seem to be victims of a world disaster and have nothing to their names, yet they have each other. The wording of the poem is very descriptive, and really does tug at your heart. The scene is so vivid, you just want to reach out to the characters and look after them! Beautiful poem. |
by Pratap Rudra
V nice, I could picture it in my mind as you narrate. Good one. |
by Em
This piece highlights how Christmas feels to many people. |