Things Gone Wrong

V. touching and deep. I think you keep on penning this way.

This poem is sad ofcourse but strong in spirit... I hate when things go wrong >_< but sometimes u gotta step up and say step off bishhhh o_o

maybe things are better without them anyway right? yea OK keep writing!!

Damn...... Now I know why you wrote this... :'(
I'm sorry for you mori Chan...
But don't give up on friendship, it is a beautiful thing.

I can't say that I am a fan of the message in this piece, but since I agreed to comment, this is on the technicality of the piece:

The word choice is well picked and the formation is interesting. Your style is well done and the flow is decent if nothing else. The last two lines show your voice in a painful, vengeful sort of way, but they were definitely an impacting conclusion.

Interestingly penned

A strong piece full of emotion and grief for a lost friendship.
The sense of hurt, betrayal and bitterness comes over so strongly here it is almost tangible. I felt so sad at the end as their differences appear irreconcilable it left me with a real sense of loss.
The only criticism I have is that it would flow much better without the capitals at the start of each line. It really plays havoc with the punctuation. Other than that. I really liked it :)