Congrats on the third place, well penned. Nicely penned. The love and longing definitely shines through here as does the understanding that the person is not enjoying their time where they are

I love this, the refranes are awesome and work well to express what you wanted to feel. The simplicity of words makes this work well too. This person is with their dad and it seems like they do not have a good relationship, maybe it has something to do with their past? But you can feel their energy and hatred toward their father because you have such a great connection with them. But you just want to know that they are safe, and by that you want them to be safe within your arms. It is Saturday and you feel like this day is dragging on forever. I Luke this because it is relatable to a lot of people and the emotions you put into this are great. 5/5