Walking on water

So short and simple, yet not too simple. lol I loved how you captured the attention right away. 'Walking on water' Just a beautiful reference to life and everything around us. Love this poem! Great Job!

*~BrittBratt~*

I really like this piece and how consistent you are with the theme, and the, can't quite place my finger on it, but the philosophical side to this? The walking on water gave me a spiritual aspect, of keeping the faith, such as Peter tries to do in Scripture then doubts and begins to drown. The vagueness of "they" is intriguing as it makes me think it could relate to whoever guides the reader, family, a support group, teachers, friends. I have been told many times about the adage of "practice makes perfect" but am not sure how much I believe it, as I know as humans, we cannot be perfect. But still we must try our best, right?

Interesting how you mentioned that you would get lazy, tired, not remember how to do what you've been trying to perfect for so long. Then that apperance of water again makes this poem more personal. Like you had been deprived of it or were forcefully separated. This whole metaphor with your love is so well-thought out and thought-provoking. Engaging with this water and learning about it, how to do the impossible with it, like learning how to love for the first time... and meeting this love the next time, it seems you take down your barriers and submerge in it, so there is no boundaries, and you are more vulnerable than before.

A few suggestions: I would put "practice makes perfect" in quotes since it is dialogue in the piece. Also, maybe separate the first line from the rest of the piece since it's an introduction?

Very strong voice in this, good work.